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BANG!
The guns start to fire and grenades are thrown.A bullet hits me right in my stomach.I collapse onto the ground and try to crawl through the vibrant red poppies that are covering the battle field.I am losing blood fast.I continuous repeat to crawl as quickly as I can but I can feel my-self slowing down.”Gotta keep going” I now start to say as my body starts to tremble and I get a cold shiver go through my spine.
My eyes suddenly close and all I can see is black...
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hi this is Bailey I really like your Battlefield writing.
ReplyDeleteincluding how he was going through the red poppies and he was losing blood
and how he closed his eyes and everything was black
Hi Baylee
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ReplyDeleteThe picture looks like it is showing the blood on the ground.
I really liked you're writing I wish you did more.
In the picture that looks like there's grenades bouncing all over the place.
Hi Kirsten I really like your big lot of writing.
ReplyDeleteit shows what is actually happening in the gun fight.
next time you should actually add even more so I loved it.